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I got her back from Death. After nearly a month, she suddenly disappeared. I was about to run into the forest to search for her but she was right there, shining like the sunrise, flourishing and peaceful. She was standing, feeling her first sunlight after the coma, her eyelids closed, seemed like she was meditating. I was paralyzed because of her beauty and the feel of peace she brought to me. There was not thing at her made me think that she was a monster. She opened her eyes, they were amber and said:
- You saved my life, let me appreciate you. Tell me your desire, I will accomplish it for you.
I said without spending any second thinking:
- I want you.
Her eyes opened bigger and I immediately realized how stupid thing I had just talked. I tried to make it right:
- I mean I want you to stay here until when I can find out what I want. I hardly think about anything except herbs and healing method.
She just smiled and whispered next to my ear: “ As you wish.”
Other monsters only dared to mention her as “ The Cold ”. It the feeling they got when she got close toward them. I didn’t feel that. She laughed out loud when I talked that to her. Then I asked for her name but she just gave me her best charming smile at whispered: “ Call me as you wish.” So I call her Luna. I explained that because I felt peaceful be with her and she was always calm, tender like the moon. She stayed quiet, seemed like she thought deeply about it. Watching that, I suddenly got the thought that she might be lonely so much. Her own father wanted her dead so that his next child with Luna’s stepmother will be able to seize the throne, other monsters kept trying run away from her. Maybe she and I were suffering the same wound – the lacking family’s warmth. I wished I could cure not only her body wounds but her heart. I told that to her as my best desire. Time was frozen, I hardly could breathe, waited for her answer: “ As you wish.”
With corrections:
I got her back from Death. After nearly a month, she suddenly disappeared. I was about to run into the forest to search for her but she was right there, shining like the sunrise, flourishing and peaceful. She was standing, feeling her first sunlight after the coma, her eyelids closed, like she was meditating. I was paralyzed because of her beauty and the feeling of peace she brought to me. There was nothing about her that made me think that she was a monster. She opened her eyes, which were amber, and said:
- You saved my life, let me thank you. Tell me your desire, and I will accomplish it for you.
I said without thinking:
- I want you.
Her eyes opened bigger and I immediately realized what a stupid thing I had just said. So I tried again:
- I mean I want you to stay here until I can find out what I want. I hardly think about anything except herbs and healing methods.
She just smiled and whispered next to my ear: “As you wish