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Topic: Gender imbalance has long been a general phenomenon not only in the labour market but also informal education. Some analysts argue that it is impossible to eliminate the misrepresentation of women in some subjects in the university. Do you agree or disagree?
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Although gender equality is widely promoted at modern colleges, females are still misrepresented in some subjects. Some people tend to treat it as a persistent problem, believing that the root of this problem is not in the university, but should be seen in a wider context. This conclusion is cursory and should be reviewed in today’s society.
The first point to note is that females have made a lot of inroads into fields that have been traditionally dominated by men. To serve in the army was, for instance, the exclusive right of males, but today, more women have been enlisted. Many would consider the army as the most ideally “men only” profession. If females can make a success of it, they can succeed in every other field. The ascendancy of woman has been seen in the surge in their prominent positions in society and in the traditional blue-collar business world. Women should not be considered unqualified or incapable of any university subject.
Universities that provide a gender-fair environment see benefits for both students and faculty. Historically, the gender imbalance at colleges has isolated students from the real world, where there is a high chance of dealing with females rather than just males. The tension or conflict between the sexes in the university environment only allows students to exercise their ability to work with peers of the opposite sex. Faculty gets the chance to address the problem of gender inequality and discrimination, which has characterized campuses for decades. This results in a better learning environment, and thus a better thought of university.
Despite what has been discussed, it should be admitted that to put gender equality into practice is a complex task. There are a number of hurdles a female applicant has to overcome in the pursuit of academic objectives, and the first is from family. Traditional families often feel reluctant to support their daughters’ quest for higher education. The idea that university is mainly for men to learn a trade to support their wives and family remains prevalent. The women’s role is being defined as supporting their husband through performing menial tasks of life.
In conclusion, achieving a gender balance in the university is no longer an unachievable aim at the present time. While the competence of women has widely been recognized by their male colleagues in a wide range of occupations, the balance between men and women in an academic environment is deemed as a necessity. Although problems such as gender prejudice and favouritism continue to prevent women’s full participation in some subjects, these problems are losing their leverage.
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