----( May 11th 2010 )
--<subway safty-door>--------------
1
(Last week, while I was waiting for the subway to arrive , )
(Last week, while I waited for the subway to arrive, )
2.
I found a poem that was written on the glass of the subway's safety door .
I saw a poem that was written on that glass of the subway's safety door ... /
I saw a poem written on that glass of the subway's safety door /
I saw a poem which was written on that glass of the subway's safety door
3.
(I felt that it was a really nice idea.)
(I thought it was really nice idea.)
4.
(When people wait in front of the subway safety door, most of them are used to waiting for the subway to arrive without doing /thinking of anything.)
(Usually when people wait in front of subway safety-door , most of them just wait for the train , without doing or thinking anything.)
(Usually when people wait in front of subway safety-door , most of them just wait, without doing or thinking anything.)
5.
(But when I found that poem, it gave me a good feeling.)
(But when I found something like that poem, it gave me a good feeling. )
6.
(Without being aware, it brought me to the world described in that poem.)
(Without being aware, it led me to the world described in that poem.)
(It brought me to that poem's world, without me being aware.)
(It led me to that poem's world, without me being aware.)
7.
(An unknown person's idea can make so many people feel ease and good
while standing and waiting in front of the subway's safety door !)
8.
(An unknown person's idea can make so many people feel at ease and good
while they stand in front of the subway safety-door waiting !)
9.
(An unknown person's idea can make so many people feel ease and good
while standing in front of the subway's safety door waiting!)
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