Hello. I'm a french guy, i write these lyrics for a song.
You can speak naturally et correct if there are some mistakes.
Thanks
Looks "LIKE"
On the sidewalk, in the street,
Upon the wall, in the News feed,
In my car in the City,
At the bar all the night,
You stare me like
I want to be seen.
Behind filters i pretend to live a perfect moment,
Under the mask i wear, emoji are still laughing.
But You can't see at night,
The faces in my dreams.
You can't hear in my nightmares,
The screams of my fears.
It looks so good
It looks so happy
It looks so fun, popular and free
What if i' m fake
A joke or a just a fucking masquerade created in your Head
Created in your head
Followers of my mind, my actings and beliefs.
No comments no more likes
You scroll me as you pleased
Memories from the past , stories of my Life
You read in me,as an open diary.
As the last judgement you think you could validate.
If i worth the pain to be a personne of interest.
But You can't see at night,
The faces in my dreams.
You can't hear in my nightmares,
The screams of my fears.
It looks so good
It looks so happy
It looks so fun, popular and free
What if you re fake
A joke or a just a fucking masquerade created in my Head
Created in your head
I really like this! This was really good! I think it's a good representation of how our social media, self-esteem, and social perceptions collide! You did a great job! I enjoyed reading it and it gave me new insights.
There was one part that I found confusing that I didn't mention in the recording because I needed to review it before giving feedback:
[You scroll me as you pleased] This doesn't make sense in a literal way, but could in a loser interpretation. maybe replace scroll with viewed? or you "scrolled past me" also flows better.
[Memories from the past , stories of my Life]
[You read in me,as an open diary.] I'd make this more succinct and take away "in" its more straight forward and has stronger imagery.
[As the last judgement you think you could validate.] Do you mean "at" instead of "as"? and i don't understand validate in this context. It works, but i haven't heard it used in this way before. Maybe use affirm? I'm still unsure of how you're trying to use this.